You came back school Yeah Oh okay I see nice so Yeah cool that good well Yeah this this our last last session so let's Yeah let's get let's get okay cool so Yeah I had a read of your I had a read of your piece that you wrote last time or was Oh Yeah I also want to say that Yeah we've spoken about George well quite a lot we've spoken about Nineteen Eighty Four quite a lot and I do think that it would be useful for you to, if you're considering if you're doing dystopian fiction again in school when that comes up. To have a read of Nineteen Eighty Four again and to consider orweld's use of language like have a look at what literary techniques you think he's using and note down stuff about setting and character and descriptions of Yeah descriptions of setting descriptions of character note down, imagery note down. Does he use any techniques like alliteration, stuff like that automatpier, oxymorons, juxtaposition? I think that would be because you've described that that book really well. You've been really perceptive about that book. And I feel like sort of taking that those ideas that you have, but digging a little deeper when it comes to language would be really helpful. Cool. Do you have I don't know if you have the the passage, the piece that you wrote in front of you, the piece of writing that you did. Should I see if I can, I can post it into the chat. I'll just grab it. I think Yeah, because I puinto chat, I don't Yeah don't worry. I copied it. I copied it so I could do this and need it. No Hist, no, okay. Okay, there it is. Yeah, so firstly I thought it was Yeah, I thought it was great, really enjoyable. I think you did the task really well. A really a really exciting opening today the you know, today I was chased down by a police officer, Greg, but what I'd say is put a full stop there again. So this is something we were talking about last week. Your sentences are really, really, really long. Well, they're not always really long, but they're just longer than they need to be. And I think probably if I were you, I would ask yourself, I'd sort of keep it, asking myself, could I make this sentence smaller or could I split this sentence up? So once you've perhaps once you've written out the full piece like this, because you know you don't want to break your break your flow. Once you've written out the full piece like this, go back and say, where can I put in a full stop? Where can I put in a semicolon? Where can I put in a comma? It's always best to try to make your sentences as short and sharp as possible where you can, because if you, if you can, then you should. And then you discover moments where you think, Oh, actually a big flowing sentence. I know why I'm doing that. I'm doing that because I want the character, I want a kind of relaxing feel, or I want the character to seem like their thoughts are jumbled and they're out of breath. But this is something that I'd Carry across into your essay writing as well. Once you've written it out, go back and think, where can I put a full stop? There's nothing wrong with breaking a sentence up, you know. So that first sentence, stares, chased down by a police officer without anything, a word of explanation. He grabbed my collar. So loads, loads of stuff in. They're really good. They're exciting. But you could put a full stop after officer. You could also put a semicolon. Then in the second half of that sentence, as it stands, you could create some more clauses. So you could put in, you know, it could be without anything. Comma, a word of explanation. Comma, he grabbed my collar. So it's more like a series of Yeah a series of ideas, a series of clauses. So Yeah, that's that's what that's some ideas for what I would personally maybe do to that first sentence. Yeah. And then for this second one, I would maybe if we're thinking about immediacy, and this is in the moment, and it's like, what's the you know what's most important to the character? It's almost like if you're if you're describing something that happened that you really want to set down, maybe you would lead with the big stuff like, Oh well, in an act of self depressed, I don't I just thought one way you could rearrange the sentences. It could be like I punched him, dash an act of self defense full stop. He fell down to his death. So it's just a way to sort of separate out the parts of it and clarify a little bit, make it a bit more immediate. Oh, okay. So like he they said him, sorry, we'll use it to show like kind of display his emotions and kind of in the diary that's we need I kind of show like make it shorter, like make it sound like he's desperate in a way. I think, Yeah, that's that's great. I think you're already doing a bit of that to be honest. It's partly just about making sure that the reading experiences is really clear and being as sort of being as minimalistic, being as terse as you can be, writing as short as you can be. So this sent him falling down to his death. Yeah. Maybe if we're thinking of what you just said in terms of maybe that's a bit elaborate for someone who's writing about something so emotive, maybe it would be he fell down to his death would be Yeah a shorter, sort of simpler way of saying it that also kind of fits with the character's emotions. Maybe Yeah, the bit I killed him, commi killed someone is great. It feels like the flow of someone's thoughts. So that's good. That's a moment where you know sometimes you might want to write in a way that you wouldn't in an essay because it feels a bit clumsy, but it does feel like how the person would would say it or would write if it were them, right? And then Yeah, I've noted again, it's most of this just about breaking it up. So what will I do now? Question mark. Should I report myself before they come and find me? Question mark again? It's just it makes the sentence a bit clearer, but it also sounds like someone who's quite desperate still, I think you know, yours does still yours does have that effect, but I think you can make it clearer by just adding in some breaking it up into some other sentences. I do think broadly you could expand these. They're good for the purpose of the exercise. Cii know you had ten minutes, but I think you could make them into you know longer accounts of the day with a bit of buildup and a bit of you know a bit of a bit more action and A A bit more thinking, a bit more thinking from the character, a bit more of the character expressing their thoughts. Yeah. One thing you should try to do in this kind of exercise is try thinking of the structure of a story for each of the Diarra entries. So beginning, middle, end, right? Something happens that causes a problem, right? So that character has a problem in that day, then the problem develops. And then there's a kind of resolution to the problem, which I think I can see that you're doing that across the whole. But try and think of that for each of the diary entries will to ithelp to give them structure. It's like thinking of the the diary entries. Or if you're writing a chapter in a book, you would think of it as like a little version of the story in itself. Does that make. Sense. So Yeah Yeah, no, I don't understand what you mean by that. So I'm sure it would so say in your story at the moment, you've got someone, you've got a problem happening, right? You've got someone's killed someone at the start. Yeah and then he's like, what do I do? The problem kind of develops, someone turns up. That's the story going a lot. And at the end of the story, I think he was saying, last time you would have had him, he would be I think he was going to be killed, wasn't he? Or something. Yeah he was going to get killed. Yeah. My plan was that he died because was found out kind of Yeah, okay, that's my plan. So then that's an ending, that's a resolution. That's the the problem is is kind of solved in a way. So do you see that you've got that structure of a story beginning, middle, end across the whole thing? But what you want to think about is, can I do that in each of my little diary entries, like for the day? So you might the problem in the first one could be he's killed someone and then he, you know, let's say he goes home and he's panicked and he's like, what do I do? What do I do? And his solution is to go to bed. So it's like you've done a small version of the big story. It's like a similar, it's like a similar structure to the to that part of to the diary entry, to each diary entry. Does that does that make sense? Okay, Yeah just it's just something to think about. It's just hopefully be helpful in your kind of you know when you do exercises like this going forward, think how can I each part, how can it be a little little kind of story in itself? So Yeah, I thought on it basically, sorry, just expand on it. Is that Yeah, Yeah expand on it. But also imagine that you're telling imagine every little if we're taking this example, each diary entry, think of that as a little story in itself, like what you've been doing for the whole, the kind of thing you've been doing for the whole thing. Yeah. Look, it's it's it's just this is just something something to keep in mind going forward. I think I think each small part of my story is like a little story in itself is the is one way to think about it. But I think this will if you keep that idea in your head, I think going forwards you'll notice that more and more you'll see how you get a beginning, which is a problem, and then the problem kind of develops, and then there's a kind of ending to that problem before you move on to a new part of the story anyway. So someone is knocking at the door. I thought that was really great, really immediate and thrilling. I thought it clashed a little bit with the fact that it's a diary entry where the character's writing about the past, but it absolutely it can work. I think if you and I actually, I thought writing in the present tense was felt like quite good. Yeah. I wonder whether that might work quite well for the writing of yours that I've seen so far. And I thought the cliffhanger was great. So that's good. So things to work out from this. I would say again, about thinking about how the story has a beginning, middle and end, but also thinking out how each part has a kind of beginning, middle and end, like an essay introduction. Give some points about the thing that you're talking about and then you conclude it, right? So it's a similar structure to that. And then finally, I would say, Yeah, try describing the settings. Try showing the world, you know if they're aren't about in the world, what are they seeing? What are they hearing? What are they smelling? What did your character notice as they ran home from having done the murder at the start? Yeah those are my okay so like like his starts like his panic Oh like kind of am I going get killed? Well, what's gonna happen? Something like that like it's quesit kind of that's great. I do think you've got a lot of that already but you you do that really well. So more of that is great but also you know let's say he's he's panicking, he's running along he stops at a street corner and he's like, and he's he notices there's smoke rising from a grill on the floor. He notices how tall and imposing the buildings are, and he feels he feels trapped amongst the tall buildings of the city. You know that's kind of like, so you know in the reaping, the reaping in the Hunger Games, it's a really big scene. It's a big scene where Kat misses. She's seeing things, she's having thoughts, she's having memories, like the bit where she remembers about hunting. So there's loads of different kinds of thing. There are loads of figout how to describe it. There are loads of different elements to the scene. And it's you know there's a start on middle and an end. But within it, we're getting what she's hearing. We're getting what she's smelling, where she's thinking about her sister, she's thinking about the about Gail, about the the guy who she's friends with. So it's like the writer is just giving us more of the experience of being in the world as well as Katla's thoughts. Does that make sense? Yeah. But as I say, you write the the thinking in the panic. I thought you were writing that really well. So don't don't lose that. But that was great. Okay, so onto this session. So this lesson is about litersure, about war. So the learning objective is I can explain why people might choose to write about war, exploring viewpoints of different writers who have chosen to write about war themselves. Success criteria is to identify and describe at least two reasons why writers might choose to write about war, to use examples from different authors or texts, including propping up the line to explain their viewpoints, and to annotate part of propping up the line to show how Ian Beck presents the experiences and realities of war. Okay. Have you read much war literature? About like about what kind of is like any books about like the First World War? Anything? Any books about about wars? Yeah, I do have some I'd had read some information about the world wars. Answer, okay, I have you read any stories about about the world like either of the world wars or story like stories? Well, I know like the timeline and like what happened, but I don't know any stories from them. Okay. Yeah, Yeah, no problem. Well, let's get this giso wall literature can be impactful because it has the power to tell individual stories. Wall literature can be impactful because it tries to explain the experiences of war to those whonot experienced it. So we're showing what it's like to be there, including you know the horror of it. Will literature can be used to expose the reality of war and serve as a warning to future generations. And arguably, war literature helps humans empathize with the pain of others. Starter quits. So in this unit, literary perspectives from the First World War, we'll look at a number of conflicts, but important one will be World War One. When do you know when World War One began and in 1914? Yeah, correct. Great. And when endy world won't end. Ended on 1980. Yeah your birthdays rights. Well done. So Yeah can you define for me a short story? What's a short story? A story that that isn't that long. Yeah which out of these would you point to? Die? You No I'll probably no no no no. Oh, D D because it's sure, right? So it's not that kind of there's not a lot. So the answer for this one is see a fictional text that can often be read in full in one sitting, to be honest. I mean, it can't also book one. Yeah, you can this is I guess, let's say most people's first settings like one city. Yeah, you're right. You're right. That's that's there's a plot hole in this, isn't there? It can also be a chapter in a book, to be honest. But it's not an underdeveloped story. It's still a whole story. It's just it's just much shorter. And it does include themes. It will include themes. But how long can they? Probably the longest a short story could be would be 60, 60 pages. Maybe after that, you know have you heard the word novella? I'm going to put it in the chat novella. So novella is between a short story and a novel. It's probably between about 60 pages and maybe 120 pages. Might. You're probably then talking about a novella, just a shorter novel, but it's not so short that it's a short story that makes sense. So you'll hear that word at some point. Okay. And on to question four. What does it mean to annotate a text. You kind of analyze it. It does. Yeah. So it's basically. No, the answer is d. So to write short notes about a moment of particular interest in the text. Yeah. Like annotating, right? Like you're kind? Yeah no, you're write analyzing, annotating. Yeah, absolutely. To write quotations in your own words. I guess that's something you could do as part of annotating a text, but it's not really sort of what annotating is like more generally. Yeah to write short notes about particularly interest in the text. So I would say it's some these are things that you've been doing in the last you know week and a half. So what does it mean to empathize with someone out of these answers here? E. So. Yes, that's right. That's right. Yeah to share the feelings of another person. Correct. Great. And World War One is known for trench warfare. What's a trench? See. That's correct. Yeah trench is a deep ditch. I guess I'd also think of them as quite sort of long straight ditch really. But perhaps that's perhaps we can have other other shapes of trenches. I don't know. Okay, some keywords here. Woliterature is a text which focuses on and explores war and conflilicts, right? So a story like the Hunger Games, but it's about a war that has happened or is happening in our world. Okay, so that's when when I was talking about war stories, not necessarily a real story that happened in the war, but someone writing about war that has happened, which it can include real real things that happened in the war, but it can also be a made up story that takes place within a war that happened. So some famous example of anything about war, basically, Yeah, there's a famous example called regeneration by Pat Barker, which is about which is about the First World War. And it's about the poet seeegfried tsoon and Wilfred Owen. They're quite famous World War One poets. You might have heard of them at some point. Yeah. Yeah wfrid Owen. Yeah so like don't chair de CoREST or something. Do you like that? Yeah. Yeah, correct. So I'm going post in the chat. This is a book. You might you might study this school at some point. I can't remember if it's which syllabus sits on or if it's on any of them still. But regeneration by Pat Barker, that's a book that it's partly about Wilfrido and he's one of the characters in it. Okay, some more ky words. Profound. That means deep or meaningful. Specific means particular, precise, exact. To empathize, as you got correct earlier, to share feelings of another person. It's a stronger feelthan sympathy. So you don't just feel foyou, feel what they are feeling. Annotate to make short notes commenting on something of interest in a text. Some key facts about World War One Yeah would you know about World War One? What could you tell me off the top of your head? No. It began in 1914, ended in 1918. It started one of the main causes of its starting was because of the assassination of archduke road, something Ferdinant and transferdinant. Yeah great. And who who were the main people? Who were the main countries involved? It was Serbia and Austria Hungary. So built and then Germany because it was it supported Oh sure hungry yes right I'm not sure so Yeah think Yeah Yeah great we're gonna that's that's great Yeah we're gonna go on some more facts so when we're again in 1914 ended in 1918 most of the fight thing happened in Europe especially in France and Belgium two main sides were the allies which included Britain France Russia later the usa and the Central Powers which included Germany Ostria Hungary and the Osman empire. So Yeah you correct Germany supported Austria Hungary while it started the war began after the assassination of archdufranance furnow, Austria but deeper causes included rivalries between countries, a race to build powerful armies and strong feelings of nationalism. Scale of the so it became the first truly global war involving more than 30 countries and around 65 million soldiers for it's extraordinary isn't it so many people of 65 million, 65 million I know that's Oh, that's unbelievable. That's how many people are there in in Britain. I think there's about 60I think there's about 60 million. The population of of Britain, I think. Well, trench warfare, much of the war was 14 trenches, long muddy ditches dug into the ground. Soldiers lived, fought and often died in terrible conditions with mud, rats, disease and constant shelling. There was new technology. So World War One saw deadly weapons like machine guns, tanks, planes and poisoned gas, chemical like chemical warfare, Yeah mustard gas and heavy artillery. And these caused huge numbers of casualties. So around 10 million soldiers died and 20 million were wounded. Millions of civilians also died from fighting, hunger and disease. And there is a huge impact on society. So almost every family was affected, many lost sons, furthers, or brothers. Women often had to take on jobs traditionally done by men, which caused huge change in society. That's one thing that Barker is writing about in regenerations, who's writing about the perspective of women at home who are having to take on men's jobs and feeling like they have more freedom and more power, and how that you know changed the way that they see their lives. Yeah. So the trauma of war deeply changed how people thought about life, death and authority. Why does it matter in literature? Writers, poets and artists try to capture the reality of war, the loss of a whole generation and the psychological effects on survivors. Their work gives us a way to understand the human side of history. Keep moving. Okay. So why do you think people write about. Is to show how terrifying it is. Yeah Yeah great. Yeah, absolutely. Yeah trying to say show how terrifying it is for we might say it's terrifying for the people, the individuals in it, but it's also kind of terrifying for society. And Yeah and Wolfer Owens in his, I forgot his poem called the one I just mentioned, he said that like you know he mocked up how sweet it was to danwith king and country. And like he said that it was just a bunch of like, Yeah, you said they Yeah like you just convey the sense that, you know you know how many people say to diet, how sweet it is to die for king dom country. Like it's not sweet to die for king dom country. If you die, you die. Like what's the point? Back with king and country, you get anything. Yeah, good point. Yeah, good point. He's criticizing the idea of duty and honor, what it means to Yeah why he's saying, Yeah why should we have died like this? And he's also, isn't he I think in that poem and in his other poems, he's showing how bullish some of the people in authority were during the First World War. A lot of it was really badly planned and executed, and a lot of people died when they didn't need to. Yeah so I've got one got another possible answer here. I think people are inspired to write about war because it's such an intense physical and emotional thing to experience. People write about it to try and understand it. Yeah. So we could say the writers themselves, someone like wilolfr Owen, he's probably also trying to write about it to try and understand it himself through literature, but he's also writing about it to help his readers understand what it means. Yeah. What were you guys? It? Yeah, so that's right. Why do people like to read about war, do you think? I think the same reason people enjoy tralike stories. I think Yeah, it's because like it makes them more grateful and I think that's one of the reasons it it makes them like it makes them feel good because you know, they have all these things and like they, the people in the film ms, they don't have these things. Yeah, interesting. It makes them feel better anyway. A, Yeah, okay. Yeah. You feel good to have your nice life rather than to be involved in something so, so horrible. Yeah interesting. Do you think only people have been to walk and write well about it? No, not really. Because if you're really good at emphasizing with something, then and if you study the history of something and you research well, then you probably could write well about one. I completely agree. Yeah, I think that's a great answer. And someone like barpat Barker in regeneration, she writes really, really incredibly about war. And she wasn't there. She wasn't there at the time, but you can tell that she's done so much research that she's really in the character's brains. Do you know Hillary manteldo, you know, like the Wolf Hall novels? Who's that hry mantelso she wrote about in the chat? Sure, about like Thomas Cromwell and Henry viii and berleyn. Oh Yeah, I studied that. Apparently they were like they were all crazy back in the day, like because Henry had like eight wives, and Mary was called Bloody Mary because she was crazy. She killed everyone. Like she literally just killed everyone. And and Yeah, I studied and and Henry had like eight wives, and he he divorced his first wife and Grathe reformation and then basically created the Protestant church because he wanted to do divorce his first wife. Yeah, that's absolutely right. So this book, Wolf Hall, is from the perspective of Thomas Cromwell, who was one of one of Henry's advisors who he took part in the killing of Anne boleen. He was he sort of set it up. He encouraged Henry to do it. And Yeah mantel, she's she's a great writer at imagining history. It's like it really feels she's it's like she's there, you know it's like she's in the head of Thomas Cromwell. Yeah. So if you're interested, if you, if you're interested in that that era of history, I really recommend this book. Itbe a great book to read. And it show you someone who is incredible, it writing about places and what it's like to to be there. The feelings of it falling in Muin the in the streets of England in the 15 hundreds. You know, she's anyway Yeah Yeah it's keep moving. So a possible answer to these would be, I can see how personal experience are really important, but right to do sensitive research could also create brilliant text ts about what even if they weren't there. So Yeah, agree with you. Many people consider these important questions about war literature. Why do people write it? Why do people read it? For example, the writer had it kind kind of like encourage peace and encouralike kind of saying that it's, Yeah, absolutely. Well, I think wilfridoen was definitely writing to encourage P. I think wanted he wanted us to see how silly was or why we should avoid it, you know, the horror of it, why we should avoid it. So an example here is that the writer, Helen Dunmore, she wrote lots of war literature about conflict she never experienced firsthand, but she argued that people struggle to truly understand facts and figures relating to wars. They find it really hard to imagine that when we're talking about 65 million earlier, they're so hard to imagine 65 million people, especially 65 million people involved in this sort of same event. So instead, profound understanding of the pain and casualties of war only takes place when a story is specific, by which I guess she means, well, that's going to be a question. I think Yeah so what motivated her to write about more? He wanted other people to understand what I like. Yeah, great answer. What do you think she what do you think she means by the word specific? It's very, very detailed. It shows like the actual reality, like the noise is what you can hear and what you can see, that type of thing. Yeah, great. I also think she means about specific people as well. Individuals, characters, getting into the heads of specific people is another thing that I would I would interpret from this and that I think is important when it comes to this literature. Many people consider see it so Oh there's another Yep so ic cugate. Oh, okay. Yeah. Okay. So we got wolf out. Woolfriends considers war literature a bridge between those who have experiwar and those who have not. What do you think own means by the metaphor? Bridge like to help understand what they are going to Yeah, great. Or first, dummore believed facts and figures about war are inaccurate, and that's why woliterature is so important. Nope, incorrect. Yeah, that's right. That's right. So she wrote lots wall literature because she knew her specific experiences would help people to empathize with the realities of war. She recognized that people struggle to empathize with facts and figures. War literature, which presenstories about particular individuals or circumstances, are more easily understandable to readers. Okay, let's say yes. Yeah let's just I think. Yeah let's just talk again about so having gone through all those different things, what were some reasons that you take away why writing and reading wall literature can be considered considered important? How would you sort of summariise the importance of war literature? I think no literature, according to those two authors, are extremely vital to understanding how painful war is. And and like because back in, let's say, 1941, 1922, people were so was like a like glory, you brought honor to your house, right? Or something. Like if you think about everything you were doing was kilill yourself. And and if you didn't go, people saw it as a cow. So like the best option is just move to another country, just move to like a neutral country Yeah because I mean, there is no point in going to war if you're just going to die. Like what the point of that? Yeah. Do you know you know about the White feathers during World War One? Yeah. Yeah. So if you didn't go, you you were brand, you were branded as like a coward and people treating Bley and given Yeah given women would give bcoward White feathers in the street. It's really, really horrifying. Yeah, honor, there's a great history of, there's a great history of literature that writes about honor which goes, which includes Shakespeare. You know, so Shakespeare, there's a famous speech from King Henry iv. Fourth part is the fourth part one, King Henry the fourth part one where fourth staff do you know fourth staff that character? No. So full stuff. He has a speech about honor where he says, where he says, can on a set to a leg? No. Or an arm? No. It will take away the grief of a wound. No. Honor ner hath no skill in surgery. What is honor? A word? What is in that word? A trim reckoning. So he's he's questioning the idea of what is honor? What does honor mean to us? What can it do? Honis honours not there on the battlefield to help you. Honours just an idea. And you know ideas can can go, can't they? Yeah. Full stuff and I'm just putting in the chat on great. Okay. So we've got some examples of some other examples. So why do we read about it to feel a personal connection with history rather than think of it as impersonal facts? To understand specific stories and experiences over general facts and figures to honthose who died by sharing their stories. That's the idea. I don't think we've haven't discussed some other ideas. Okay. And Yeah, here's another summary. Some of the reasons we've considered why someone might write a piece of woerture to warn people about the horror of war, to inform people about the realities of war, to help people empathize. That's a really important word here. And I guess that's a word that we've considered quite a lot in the last week and a half, help people empathize with those who experience enced war olf, to honor those who have fought and died in wars, to make connections with personal stories, to generate a deep understanding of the experience of war, to tell of the experiences of those who can't tell the stories themselves. So you know the dead, they can't tell the stories themselves, or possibly people who, Yeah they aren't as they aren't able to write stories. They aren't as well. They aren't able to get stories published. And to explore, get anyway, if you won't low me once you're dead, what's glory going do for what's you're dead? What's what's good about glory? Like the only thing that glory will do for you like when you die, Oh, someone will remember but how someone remember you in like what in in how many like 50 million people? How is someone going to remember you and a Yeah although you know there are there are monuments to the dead and like in a lot of British villages, for instance, there are blacks holding the names of the people who died in these wars. But it's tough, isn't it? Because there doesn't be like loof them anymore. Yeah, I think you'll probably right. You know, if you or I were to go to one of these villages and see those names, like what do they, what do they mean to us? Tough. Yeah. What you were just saying about gory, I mean, I think if you have to do any writing exercises about, well, here's two ideas. If you have to do any writing exercises where you write imagining as if you're in a war, Yeah, perhaps that could be an idea for what you could you could be exploring. Or perhaps you could you could write an essay. If you had to write a essay, you could write an essay about glory in war or honoring war. Yeah, a couple of ideas there. Okay, so. So there's a story called propping up the line. So in back the story called propping up the line. And arguably, he's done many of these things in his in that short story which was inspired by his grandfather's experiences in World War One. So. This Sathe story starts. Alfred felt something move. It came out of the mod in the dark behind his back, where he sat cold and drowsily slumped against the trench wall. So what are, what thoughts do you have? How might you annotate this opening to this story? Maybe. Maybe like at the start, just kind of like at the very, very start, describe what he felt first and then do the move thing. Like he thought something. Like describe a noise or something. Well, if you're thinking if you're thinking about the reasons why, if you're thinking about what we've just been saying, the reasons are for for writing wall literature. Can you connect anything in this little passage here to those reasons that we've been that we've just been talking about? Oh how how btowas like it literally like sitting a mud like what mud and like you know it's the condition on all that well like well why would you go to war if you're are gonna live in these conditions? Is it actually worth it? That type of thing Yeah so you've Yeah exactly so that is you know that's a reason why people write well it's just showing how brutal is and then Yeah, that is something that I think Ian Beck is doing in the start of the story. So Yeah, great. So that's good. That's good. I would also say I'd say it's a horrifying image. It feels like it could be the start of a horror story. You know like something with tentacles is gonna to come come from behind them. I would also say there's a little bit of once there's just going to check it the word. There's a little bit of sibilance in there. Do you know what the word sibilance means? Sibilance like esssounds. Yeah, Yeah, exactly. So drowsily slumped, I don't know, there's sat cold and drowsily slumped. So I think you can say there's a little bit of little bit of sibance in there. And also the reason that they give in here is they say back immediately gives us a name which makes the story personal, creating a protagonist that we can connect to. So again, that's something that we can do with wall literature as we can make it personal and individual and specific. Yeah. Okay. Yeah what? So which is the most convincing annotation? Which comments on this line from, you know, the line that we've just been reading? Beck tries to warn us not to fall asleep in a trench as something bad could happen to the word. It shows Alfred doesn't know what it is. Or Beck tries to convey the realities of a trench through his description, mud, dark, cold wall. Which of these do you think is better, would be better in an essay if you were annotating this and you were going to write an essay about using it? I'd say the first one because if you see it, it's unknown, right? And so it gives a sense of somethat somethinis awit's. It's somethin's in a in a trench, everything so mysterious and foreign. It's so dirty like this. It gives it like a sense of it's it feels very mysterious and ominous, like dangerous. I think it can be that sense better. But Yeah, so I the so the answer in this case is the second one, but I think you're right in terms of what you've identified there. So well, the second answer is the kind of thing that we should write because it's talking about the specifics of language. And it's not just talking about specifics of language. It's connecting the specifics of language to the thing that's being written about. It's saying in wall literature, we want to write about the reality of war. So using these words helps with that. But at the same time, I think what you've said about how it the use of the word it is scary, I think that that's a really good point because it's kind of the word it is creating mystery and horror. So I think that you're I think you're right in that, but I do think the start of this first one where it says Beck tries to warn us not to fall asleep in a trench as something bad could happen to you, that's that's kind of that's the really incorrect part. That's not the kind of thing that would be useful to to Anto annotate to write in an essay. So next. Okay, so let's read. This. Okay. So this is a reading task. So are you able you able to see this? Okay, so have a read have a read of this and then we'll have a chat about it. Let me know once you've finished reading this page, and I'll move on to the next one. Yep, I'm done. Great. And move on to the next one. Oof. Which were many in the world who survived to like mental problems or mental trauma, like extreme mental trauma, if they like Yeah, right. Yeah, that's correct. And so the book I was telling you about regeneration by pabarker is it's set in a hospital that treats people who have shell shock like wilfrired owand secrefrid sasno not not just shell shock, like just like you know like trauma from this. Yeah, absolutely no, you're Yeah you're absolutely right. Yeah. Okay, so I'm going to flip back onto this previous page. Okay, how would you how would you annotate this? How would you what would you write next to it if you were if you had to write about sort of why why he's written it in this way, why he's used these words, why the sentences are written like this, what thoughts do you have about it? Like it uses his senses and like what he's feeling to like kind of show how brutal the war the war was. Yeah great. Unlike how how normal these conditions are. Like you know you can see rat every day. Yeah Yeah yes Yeah what else? What what words pick out some words for me that you think are interesting. Something move. Ya. Small and warmly alive. Okay, how come? Because it's like, let's say, let's say you're just sleeping and then you feel like something scuttling around your skin. Like I would generally like, Yeah, how would you feel uncomfortable, right? Yeah, well, I think because like nobody really minds them, because I think it shows how normal these conditions are. Yeah. It's like this character's been pushed to breaking point at this point, right? This is the moment where they crthey're. Like, this is enough pick out can you pick out for me an interesting sentence? A sentence that you think is structure is made up in an interesting way that looks interesting. Looks interesting. Yeah. Any with an interesting structure to it. Oh at the end he knew just what it was a filthy and then and then it it continues in the next paragraph. It doesn't end there. Yeah great. So it interrupts. It's interrupted. Yeah it's interesting in there. It's there's an interesting use of ellipsis. Do you know what ellipsis is? I've heard of it. Why is it ellipsis? It's the dok dot k dot. The one, the dot, so the dot dot dot after filthy and the dot dot dot after anger, hate, loss, pain. But Oh. There was a okay, so use by thought, you use an ellipsis like you know like when when you do like when you when you when it's when there's a lot of stuff and then you just Press the. Like you don't continue, but it continues. Yeah but it's it's sometimes we we use it to sort of give the impression that someone is is thinking or is kind of slowing down. Yeah. So it's a Yeah, it's just it's another literary technique, but it's called an ellipsis. So when you see this dot, dot, dot, that's an example of an ellipsis, which you will see you will see quite, quite a lot. So Yeah, it's not always used to imply that there's something missing. It's sometimes it's like it's like, I'm talking like this and I wonder if about that. And Yeah, it can indicate that sort of like searching for words almost or to be honest, it's just, it's a literary technique where you you can you can you can say, how do I think that they're using that? Do I think that they're struggling for words? Do I think that they've run out of words? Do I think that they Yeah, Yeah there's a variety of use to it, but it's called ellipsis. Drop that into the end of the chat. Okay, let's skip onto sorry, wolet shocan be impactful because it has the power to tell individual stories. Can be impactful because it attempts to explain the experience of water, those who have not experienced it, and it can be used to expose the reality of war and serve as a warning to future generations. Arguably, wallet share helps humans empathize with the pain of others. So that is a lesson on on wallet Shand, that's that's it. That's it for these sessions. Yeah. Well, thank you. Thank you. No, thank you. They've been Yeah, you've been you've been great. You've been really perceptive and your analysis has been great. So Yeah, and I hope I hope going back to school is goes goes well. Thank you. A nice have a nice week. Thanks. Yeah, great. Okay. Well, Yeah, hopefully Yeah, great. Well, thank you very much Spencer and take care. Thank you, thank bye.