Hello. Hi, do you hear me? Sorry now. Hopefully you can hear me. Okay? Okay, hope you're doing well. Sorry, ena. Wait. Oh, in the right classroom. Yes, see, you are in the right classroom. Yeah is it because it's a new tutor? Yeah Yeah I think so. It's on the new tutor. Hopefully it's for the next couple lessons. Totally. So nice to meet you, Serina. My name is hiari. You can follow me. And being alive. All good. So Serena, I think you had a homework but I assume that the homework is not for today. Is it today or for the next lesson? I don't know if I've already finished it. You finished it. Okay, perfect. Maybe I can actually give it a give through so you can kind of show me what you wrote so you did how Yeah how okay. Let me see if I can enlarge your. Yeah, if I enlarge you. You can probably share your answer on the screen. No, I can't. You can't. Okay. That's okay. All good. That's fine with your previous teacher. How were you able to showcase the answer? Lori, need to read it out loud or just send it. So shall I send it in the chat? Yeah, you can send it on the chat. Oh Yeah, that will be better because I can see what you wrote. Okay? Let me check this here. Where e's my second page gone? Okay, what a page. Okay. I least got one page first class then. So bit much anyway, I'm expensive. And then this is only one of the pictures. And I'm to try to send through another. Oh, my. God. I can't find the other picture, but. Do this. I still didn't see it on the job. Oh, Yeah, I got it. Oh, lovely. Wow. I'm through. I've got one ones. Nice. Come through. Come through. Why is it not coming through? I'll try again. Okay, it's not coming through and it comes through. I'll just send it. Okay, no problem. All good. All good. Oh, can you like make feedback back to normal? Now that's normal this way. Thank you all. Yes. Alright. Okay, you got it. Okay. Yep. 的看不到。Oh no, mine, it's fine. It was just just stablack can't slioh well, is there something wrong with like my emails? And like it just sometimes goes black, the pictures. Okay, that's okay. Yeah I able to see my image review. I can't see you see because okay, let me just try. And so you did this. Like innovable, I think, right? Yeah, okay, wow. Looks very colorful and appealing. So you pick why did you pick in specific to this specific gap? Itinerary all, why did you pick this specific itinerary pain? Oh, because she told me to like do a do about a like location or like country or something and I just, I almost trying to choose like a European countryside that I kind of know about it, but I to destroy Spain because I don't like the other European countries. Okay, perfect. All right. So I would say it's a very good layout with very good eye catching colors. And Yeah, the fun choice to everything is clear. The illustration of the flag and Yeah and the fish would illustrate the seafood teeth. The weather chart clearly shows how it will organized. Well done. Maybe for a welcome to Spain apart, maybe you could welcome to Spain and then put a dash during that. You're referring to Yeah a country full of seafood. That would be nice. Yeah grammatically, the next sentence is correct, the next one is also correct. Good. And maybe when you mentioned about having almost 3.3 million inhabitants, you can probably put a comma Yeah and then say with the metropopollitan population of of about 6.8 million, that would be great. Okay哎。Yeah and Yeah even with the picture, if you I think the second picture which represents the building, you can actually take it more towards the right corner so that you won't overlap it with the word million on it. Yeah Yeah those are like the minor ones, but it's really good. I like it especially for a student that wow, it's amazing. Good. Nice. Well then okay, so maybe because you can't send me now the other one other the homework, you can send it to me after the lesson that's perfectly alright. Okay, okay. All right. So today's task we will be moving on to the next section. Let me kind of show you what's needed to be done. So let me screen share for a second. Can you see my screen? Yeah. So you actually completed these two tasks, which means we will move on to the descriptive writing part. Are you going with that for today? We will be looking at descriptive writing for today. Okay, alright, then let me share the new poll. Okay, hold up. Okay, so Yeah, that's the other section. Let me open up the other one. I have to show you the other one. Okay, so have you done descripture writing before arena or no? Alright, have you done descriptions writing? Yeah, Yeah, okay. Okay. So when it comes to descriptive writing, I think it's very important to know some of the expressions. It's very important. Have you done descriptive writing with your other tutors or no? Sorry, have you done descriptive writing with your other tutor or no? You haven't done? No, I think I think we you've done like creative writing and like like we've done like travel based non fictional things. Okay, perfect. And that's good. Sounds good. All right. So our learning objective but today is to look at the five senses when you write descriptive writing to see the five senters. I like your smile. Hopefully you're smiling for the lesson and not being distracted. Okay, so Yeah, we are going to focus on that and then we're going to look at an example and afterwards, probably if we have time, we will do a descriptive writing, a very short one. After that you will be doing one for homework and I will be excited to see you on descriptive writing is fine. Okay, hopefully you like homework. Okay, perfect. Alright. Oh, that's a no. Okay, got all. Thanks, Sylva. So the main part we need to know is when it comes to descripyour writing, your examiner, anyone who reads you want to see the five senses, because in any picture, you can actually create that image in your mind and think that as a story. I am pretty sure, Sita, when you read some books, you probably imagine the characters to whatnot in your head with specific changes, right? So that way, even for story building, we do that. So when we look at what you can see, the main parts are basically the colors, objects, the people, the scenery. We will look at an example which will be more clear for you. The sound. Of course, you can't see the you can't see the sound, but yes, you can kind of visualize it. Yeah. So we will look into that. When we look at the hearing process, we look at the voices and the animals, usually in a description writing in your age usually that bring any sort of animal just to make it more like A I would say a childhood way of bringing in some sort of animal in a descriptive writing. Okay, smell is part of I think you'll know I want be explaining it. So I'm just gonna ask you Serena, look at the content I've highlighted and tell me if you understand what each senses would represent and if it's if something isn't clear, you can ask me. I will explain it in detail. Yes. Yeah. Yeah, Yeah. Yeah, Yeah, Yeah, okay, okay. Oh good, nice. Okay, okay, okay. Then Yeah looking at this specific picture, I think from the five senses we specifically, I mean for me I think that's what I put these are the five senses and what I would imagine, okay, not like I can see everything but I can imagine myself seeing, hearing, smelling, thought of that. So let me know if you understood these after that. If you don't, I will explain each one. All good, sera, are you lost? All right. Yeah, that okay. All good. Is it clear or what you were? I mean, for me, I would add these for each senses. Sorry. Oh, can you hear me? Is your iearphone working? Hello Yeah it was a little bit like it was like that like can you say yes, I was saying in this picture what I feel all these five senses I have put it in word keyword for okay, so hopefully Yeah. And one thing you got to note, to level up your descriptive writing, you need to use much better words, not just hot good, nice try to avoid wig words. I would say try to use more catchy words that will express more than the meaning, right? And as you see, when we say happy, like it can be just happy, but when you say joyful, cheerful, it has more meaning towards happiness, right? Okay, yes. So most important thing also, we see in descriof writing, you'll see how some grammatechnitics are important. Stiarly metaphor and personification. Yes. And he salfor like 10s. I just need that. I don't want to wear my headphones anymore. Wait. And I just want check my thing. Yeah, I can hear you. Okay, perfect. Alright, I will repeat myself again. So all good alclear, alright, so Serina, so in this specific description writing, it's also important for you to have the grammatical techniques first. Searly, metaphor and personification. Very important. And it gives a strong meaning to what you need to describe. So example here would be like assimile as you know you would use as or like the water was clear as the glass. So you can kind of picture and it gives that strong strength of how clear the water was, right? Even for metaphor, it's basically like showing the strength of and the significance of what you wanna say. Personification giving life because it has probably the sensors like we do. Alright. Now if you probably understood everything, and since you know descriscripted writing, this is a sample. Okay, so read it and see if you understand the descriptive writing. This just a good one about, I specified this. Read it out loud or just read it to yourself. Whichone works for you, reading it out loud or to your mind itself. Okay. Yeah, okay, alright, hopefully it was clear. Did you kind of understand and kind of get a sample way of writing a descriptive paragraph? Were you able to understand how descriptive writing would work in a paragraph? Just an idea. Hopefully yes. Wait, what do you mean? What I mean is, did you understand the passage, the paragraph that was given? Yeah, okay. That's what I didn't already know it really had a meaning but like okay. Oh, okay, alright, let's see if you are able to. Isn't it just it's about like isn't isn't it just about like these random things? Random things. It is part of a random thing, but mostly to do with describing it can be in in this case, it's about the specific picture I looked at and looking at the mountain village and I'm describing that in a paragraph. Oh Yeah, Yeah. But your task is to actually, I'm going to give you the choice of choosing one topic from here. Okay, you get to decide which topic you want to do and or maybe I would say 100 words you'll be writing and after writing three lines, probably you'll pause and tell me what you wrote so I'll know what you have added from the five senses and any grammatical techniques you have used. Okay, are you up for that? Are you ready for it? Oh, no. Oh, you're not ready for descriptive writing. No. Okay. Are you like descriptive writing? No, as like as like. Am I just doing anything? I gave you five topics, right? You can choose which one you want to do. Is it about that? Oh, you can see my screen, right? Sabina, so the five topics, the peaceful beach in the morning, busy city street at night, a park after the rain, a colorful festival or a fair, a train journey through the countryside. Okay, do you want me to pick one for you? I want you to okay, maybe a colorful festival. Yeah, but I can do, I can do myself. I can do myself myself. Okay, all. And let me know which one you could Yeah, okay. Sorry about my dad barking from the background. Oh, but this I didn't see. Bless you. If you were planning this news, I didn't catch that. Did you try again? Oh my God. So that was you for it. Like I was like, Oh my God. Sure. Robotic. Yes, that was Suri. I don't know of. Sorry, I didn't hear that cause you tried again. I was like, I got it. Okay. Which topic did you choose? A A busy city street? Okay, okay, perfect. Now I heard it. I'll thank. I finished perfect me here. The city street was bursting with energy and light. Tall builsparkled like stars and cars halked as they crawled through the traffic. People rushed past catand laughing, while the smell of sizzling noodles drifted through the warm night air. Scooters weep. Yeah, we between the cars, there are lights flashing like the like tiny fiflies music played from a nearby shop, mixing with the sounds of voices and engines. Reflections of glowing, signed shimmered in puddles on the ground. Even though it was nighttime, the city was still wide awake, buzzing with energy. Wait, did I wrote buzzing toice? I think so. Bear in mind, that's okay. That's still repetitive. So wow, that's impressive. Serena really liked it. Wow, that is really good. I liked it. It was so good. I pictured myself imagining myself specifically. I don't know why, but during Christmas, so cool. Yeah, so very. I don't know why, but I just pictured myself being there with your own topic, your descriptive writing, but during Christmas time, I don't know why. Well then I'm just gonna give you that accidentally. I added three before. Sorry about that. Sorry about that. Okay, Serena, that was actually good. I really liit maybe I thought sorry to might need an example, but I don't think you need an example. But Yep. Just this is just the idea what I wrote, but I think Yeah like a quick one until you were done. So you can probably skim through this one. After that, you can just let me know. Yeah. Oh, sorry. Did you read through this one by skin through it? Yeah. Yeah. Okay, perfect. All right. That's arena. Since our the said lesson was supposed to be descriptive writing, I suppose. So I have a challenge for you. You were able to pick from these ones, but I think you can challenge yourself. Challenge, hopefully it's a little high level. So can you see my screen? Me? Yeah. These are the three. Maybe easy for you, maybe not. Hopefully you're able to ace it. But yes. So either you can write for 150 words, the abandoned amusement pithe old library, or after the storm. What would you choose? I passage again, sorry. I checthe passage again. Oh, yes, of course you can. It didn't say anything in the passage, did it? Oh, no, no, no. This was just example but what I'm saying is I'm going to give you the next level that is quite challenging either about you're to right. These are the topics for the descriptive writing. Feel like you love dancing. Okay. So Serena, are you ready for the next challenge? Either you're gonna to write the descriptive writing on the topics of these three, you can choose one or I can choose it for you. Sorry, I hear you. Oh, now you put the earphones again. Okay? Alright, so now I can. Now I can. Now I can. Okay, so can you tell me, Serena, about it? I gave you three topics. Which one would you go with? Which one would you like to write about? An amusement park? Okay, well, hopefully you had some experiences. Maybe not. Okay, then let's hear your answer. The old amusement arc was quiet and still like he had forgotten how to have fun. The eyes were rusty and covered in dust, and the paint on the signs were peeling off. Weeds grew through the cracks in the ground where people once laughed and ran. The wind made the metal creek and and the on and an old balloon seen string waved on the fit smelt. Smelled? Is it Smout smor? Is it Smout? We can say smelt is also fine, but smell, but smelled like rain and rust. Sometimes I thought I could almost hear the music I used to play, like the park was dreaming about the past. Okay, all right, finished. Perfect. Wow. Okay, Serena, that was really good. I think descriptive writing seems really like good with you. That means you have a good layout in your descriptive writing skill. Well done, describut. I don't really like creative. So that's why maybe your strength would be descriptive and maybe weakness would be creative. Maybe that's why. Yeah, probably probably right. Okay, so along White, there are two screens that's appearing. Absolutely. This is the right screen. Yeah. Okay. So before we move on, Yeah we are going to look at some specific topic that I was requested to do for today. Let me open that soon. Okay, today, yelesson three, we will look into the detail. Let me screen share that one for you. Can you see my we can not anything I accept the screen it was on like ten minutes ago. Let me advice. Yep. Here you go. Yeah let me show you. Why did it say this one? It's visible now. Okay. Thinking what happening? You can see my other screen, right? No. Hmm. Me another can you see my screen Serena now okay. Think you can see and I can actually I can see a screen but I can't see like no it was like the same how about now should work Yeah. Now I can hear it. Perfect. Okay, so we are moving on to the unit one lesson three the travel launcher. But I think you did it. So you did amazing with that. So Yeah a learning objective. I think you said you did an unfiction writing to create this trebrochure. So after that, did you do this section or not yet with your school with your we haven't okay, so far as you see you worked Yeah completing the brochure. Hopefully you got an idea how to do it. I even have an example so I can show to you later. Yes. Hey, this is more towards Yeah we're going to look at this. Yeah let's look at the steps, right? The example you give me for homework was really good and impressed. It was really good. So I think Serena, you itself probably had the experience to try out a different probably you got different brushes from many people when you walk past by right? Have you forgotten some brurooms or no all? Have you so like examples, sometimes people would just share their brochures to you like while you're walking. They're just you know try to give it to your hand to check it out. Have you seen that? No, you have an experience. No. Okay, then that's fine. Yes. Okay. Let. Me see. Yeah so as you see, we will look into editors 's checklist and the layout. We're going to work in the form of persuasive writing. Okay, so let me see Yeah the travel brochure. You did it. So let me see about Yeah two. 我没。Okay, so all right, we're going to do this. Okay. What type of lair do you think would actually fit a brochure? Sorry, so what type example? Let's say when you pick the Spain as your itinerary, what gave you the pictures? How did you lay out the pictures? Okay, I went on canvas and then there there are templates there, so I just like, Yeah, okay, all right. Okay. And yes, that said, so mainly the pictures were from Canva itself. No not not the pictures or anything. It's just like like on the on the template there was like this picture that was like a picture but like a picture of like around dom thing and and there was like and then on the text as a title blah blah blah blah like like that okay, alright, okay that way alright then that's fine then yes, okay, so looking at the brochure, yes I have done this in school the travel brochure together in a group or not yet. No, okay, then that's fine. Okay. Because I think in your next letter, Paul, let me show you the. Descriptive writing was done and the brochure, okay. And I think it said about research skills, do whatnot, right? We completed these two in particular. Serena, do you have anything in mind that you want to cover for today's lesson? I'm not sure anything or not. Okay. All right. Descriscriptive writing was clear for you for today date. Is it not? Okay, perfect. That's fine. That's all good. Okay. So we also have to do, have you started off with the reading section with your other tutor or no? Alright, have you started the reading section with your other tutor? No, I don't think so. Okay, or then that's fine. You. Can see my other screen now or no. Yeah, I can see it. Okay, perfect all. Right. Okay, let me just now I don't think you have done this section. Hopefully you can see my screen looking at the different bushes and Yeah. Different brochure. Can you see this? Do you have a textbook that you followed, Serina or no, no, no. Okay, then the homework that I think will be listed will be apart from looking at a specific brochure and getting an idea to do another one. Let me show you, okay? Wherever is it? Yeah. Let me just show you this one. Okay. When you were doing your brochure, did you find anything White hard or difficult? I'm just going to show you. Okay, then that's fine. All right. So I'm thinking of either giving you one homebook on completing brosure, or do you prefer doing a descriptive writing for homework? Descriptive writing. Descriptive writing. Okay, sounds good. Then I will show you other descriptype writing later. So when it comes to broshure, I believe even in your homework, I prefer to have the other homework too to give you feedback. But Yeah, when you mentioned about the seafood, I think you could address more pictures on the seafood side. Okay? That would be good. Alright, can you hear me? Yeah so something you could use in your brochure because we looked at descriptive I'm just gonna add this here. You see that you can remind yourself to use words which can be used in creativity writing, supative writing and descriptive writing, right? So if you see you can kind of use these ones too, right? So you can kind of emphasize on such main points. For example, I've come across a brochure whenever it's about Disneyland or some amusement parks, it says, don't miss out halween Halloween Halloween team costume time, right? That means during that specific time, it's a limited time offer where you get to try out something new, right? So in the case of that, have you ever experienced a brocha that kind of said in a limited time offer? Usually they say that in a limited time offer, there is a discount. Or in a limited time offer example in Japan and living the time of you k client, Mount Fuji. Have you ever come across that Serena, specific ways to catch or grab the customerattention? No. No, no, not at all. Okay, alright, right then that's fine that's okay. So I actually had a brochure about Sri Lanka. This is one. Can you accept the words? Of course you need the pictures and all but looking at what I can say about this specific country, about a specific famous city, something I wanted to show you. Okay, even in your Brochet, I think you could have added some more detail. Okay, so can you give can you give a actually can you read this section a little and let me know how it is? Okay. Okay. And tell me what you see. Okay, alright, and tell me what you see as a plus point and what grabbed your attention to visit. The sacred Buddhist side. Yes, correct right. That's and what else? I know like maybe splocals. Friendly locals es that's that grabs the attention. Sion, yes. Yeah, okay. Anything else? Anything else you think they could have added from the brochure? You could have added anything? You think they could have added something that can grab the customers or anyone who's reading it could probably gain more information about the specific place. Do you think there was something they could have added. Maybe what such as what. Such as. Oh, my God, I have no idea. I, for instance, might, some people might not even know where Sri Lanka is situated, which continent they could specify that. I know where srlanka, like I don't know where srlanis, but I know srlanka it's like Middle East kind of all middle. East. Yeah I mean, Yeah, it's in the Middle East, it's in the Southeast Asia, it's actually down. So Yeah okay. So that information could have been addressed, right? And anything else you think if you were if you were to this broa, what would you any feedback you will give in. Speak anything, you can make it a bit more, just not you. Yeah he can make it more descriptive. Descriptive? Yes. As you see, descriptive is important. So what about are there any? Because you know in the broa, if you're going to provide it by other people, you need to make sure that spelling, sponctuations, grammars are all there, right? Are there any mistakes with spellings or punctuations or grammar in that specific case? Yeah. Oh, like there's a coma spce. Right Yeah that's Yeah Yeah Yeah okay. And then. No idea. Okay, let me think and then. And I have no idea. Yeah, okay, that's good enough. Yes, that's all right. Good. Good. I think you gave up. You actually gave good points. Yegood, okay. If you were to work in a group, right, you actually did your homework by yourself, and this is also by only one person. But let's say that you were supposed to do in a group, if you are supposed to do in a group, you will have to share each person having a specific role. They have to add, right? So if you in a group, you'll have different people doing different tasks, right? Each person will do different tasks. So Yeah, we have editor in chief, copy editor to designer. But in the case of you, I would say you be the opereditor as you see the person who is responsible to check the entire like overall article, right? So that's what you did. You kind of did check the article, the brochure I showed you now. And of course, before you submitted the brochure to me today, did you check all the grammar, punctuation and the spellings? Or my own. Yeah. Oh Yeah Yeah okay that's good so Yeah then as you see you did the punctuations to all the Yeah so you know what type of writing style also to use you can even have a mixture of it so Yeah that said Yeah to right there Yeah that's next all so overall you did your homework so I think Therina I will give you because I think they assume that you wouldn't do your homework right now but get an idea from the brochure but I didn't do it Yeah so I'll give you a descriptive writing as a homework okay so I think I'll look forward for that one okay alright right okay and rain this is it for today. I hope you had a good lesson Yeah do you have anything you want to add in or see if you have you can No Yeah No Okay then yes this is it. Hopefully that's clear and hopefully you had a good lesson. Hopefully if you did that will be great. But yes, have a nice day Serena and see you next time. Thank you. Bye bye. Bye bye.