And we focused on like organizing our thoughts and outlining the essay, right? So for today, what we're gonna to do is kind of just see how that can be applied with a bit of time. So on the next side, I have a bunch of different essay prompts and then we're gonna na have 30 minutes to actually write the essay. I think you should write a full essay in the span for like the way that you would answer on an exam. And then I don't there's not a way for you guys to post written things in the chat, is there? Oh, I think we can. Okay, so I'll have you guys type out the essays and I'll time it for 30 minutes and then we'll go into reviewing them, we'll to kind of read them out loud and we'll share them and we'll go over kind of the things we like, things we don't like, things we can work on. How does that sound? Okay, fantastic. So I'm going to have you each choose a different prompt. So the options are what is a problem facing your community and how would you hope? I actually recommend typing out this so we can post it in the chat so we can talk about it. Okay. So the answer, what is a problem facing your community and how would you help fix this problem? If you could travel back in time, what period would you travel to and why? Describe a time where you overcame a challenge. What did you learn from this experience? Who is someone who had had a significant impact on your life? Describe the impact this person had and why it was important to you and what career are you interested in? What skills do you have and make you succeed in this career? So who wants what question. I'll choose the second one. Okay, Bob, what are you thinking? I also would choose the one. Okay, do you guys both th can write this essay? Okay, so I'll start a timer for 30 minutes. Does that sound good? Ready, set, go. I'm vart. Okay, you guys have ten minutes left. All right, guys, you guys have five more minutes. Okay, you guys have two minutes left. I finished. Okay, we'll give it another minute and a half. That's how much time is left on the exam. Finish okay, fantastic. Why don't you guys put it in the little the little chat function? Why don't we drop those in there? And we'll go through them together. How does that sound? Can you guys put them in the chat? Yeah, we did. I don't, I don't have anything. I can't see anything. You can't. No. I could see right there we go. Okay, fantastic. Let's do so let's also read out these kind of key points and then we'll kind of grit against what these are saying. How does that sound? Yeah. Okay. So the key bits of information for what the point of these kinds of essays are is that the people, what they're really looking at is your ability to evaluate and discuss a complex topic. I no, they're usually they want to they want you to be able to explain your writing style, right? They don't really want to. It's not about showing off necessarily. It's more about like demonstrating your ability to write clearly. So they really want to look at is they want organized information, information being presented in an organized manner. They want focused content not to like kind of go off and talk about other stuff, but to really focus on what the question is asking and they just want to make sure that you can write clearly and concisely, right? So we're going to look at stuff through organization, focus and clarity. Does that okay. Does that sound good for a kind of like main three things we're gonna to look at? Yeah. So I'm just going to put a little text box here. Brilliant. So who wants to read their essays first? Brian, yours isn't first, so why don't you read your essay out loud? Okay? Millions of people dream of going back in time to see ancestors, meet dinosaurs and see great things. And I think that I would go back in time to learn about our ancient civilizations and ancthat's. Why? If I could travel back in time, I would go to the cavman era, or learning about them, or giving them more knowledge and more experience. People now don't know much about how we were some thousands of years ago. Sure, we know a little about cavman from evidence and observations, but we still have much to learn. What were their to the food? Did they hunt large animals or small ones, or even hunt at all? And I could find answers to any of these questions we ask and even bring back some evidence. We need to learn much about our ancient selves to see how much we have evolved. Nowadays, pollution has taken over all of the amazing things our world used to have. If I traveled back in time, I could see many things, the things, views, animals, plants, etcetera. Taking pictures of all of these could sell for thousands, and just seeing them could take my breath away. Humans need a way to look all the amazing things our world has into operca. Thousands of years ago, in traveling to the cave, man air could help. I want to see a real mawith baby. Darthese questions could be answered just with this choice of going back to this air. If we go back into the time, we could teach gimen the knowledge that we have now, so that in the future we could learn even more and create a more amazing things. Maybe cavman could be as smart as us, where they can also help extinct animals, not ancient animals, not go to extinction. Think about all the amazing things that this could behold. If I could travel back in time, I would teach. I would for sure go to the caand area to teach some things, learn about them and view experiences that nobody has ever seen. Both. Thank you. Thank you. So great job. When we're going to look at when we look at organization, clarity and content focus, what are we what are we thinking along those three kind of axes? Eric, so if we're on a tenth for organization, I would say it would all it is pretty well organized. So I would say it's an eight out of ten for organization. For clarity, I would say is more of a seven out of ten and content focus would be an eight out of ten because it is focusing on pretty much one topic. Brian, do you think that's fair? What do you think. Yeah, I think that's fair. Okay. So for organization in aid action, what do we think? How do you think this could be better organized? I. Would think it would be better organized if for when it says, want to see a real mammoth or a baby darwolf, I think maybe we could, because the point of this essay was to write something about going back in time to whatever period you want. Brian said he would want to to the, he would want to go to the cavman time or time period, I think. But if if we're talking about going to cavman periods, I don't know if baby ywolves or real mammoths would be part of why you would want to see it if you want to help cavman. So I would say I don't need remove it because it is a good touch, but I would say probably improve it by kind of more talking about cavman than how much you're talking about other things. Okay, Brian is talking about going back to the era too, but I see what you mean. I think for organization, it is really strong. You stick like clearly to a topic and you talk about everything in order. I think the only thing I would say is to focus on so you want na go for three main reasons. You want na go because you want to see it and experience it. You want na learn from cavemen and learn what they're doing, and you want to help cavman and kind of share your knowledge with them, right? That was weird. I don't know how I feel about that. The only thing that I would say for organization is just make sure that you hit each of these kind of in any order. You don't bounce around very much, but there's a few times you like are talking about wanting to go back because itbe beautiful and then helping them and then go back to it being beautiful, just focusing on making sure that each point other than that, I think the organization is very strong. For clarity, I think this is very well written. I think it's very clear. The only thing I would say is maybe be a little bit more specific in what you're talking about. Does that make sense? Do you agree, Brian and bo? And sorry, I'm talking quite a lot now. Yeah, Yeah, Yeah. Okay. And the content focus is great. You answer your question clearly, you know exactly what you're talking about and you don't stray from that. Bowin your turn. How do you are you ready? Yeah. Okay. Okay. Traveling back in time is something we all wish we could do, but because there are many benefits of doing, if I could time travel back in time to any period, I would go to 20600 bce in Egypt because of a few regifew reasons. The first reason why I'll travel to Egypt in 20600 bc is because I would be witnessing the Great Pyramid of visza being built so I can see what they did to build it and how long it took. If I could see how they were built, that would solve a lot of it. There was some theories about it, and if I knew how long it took for them to build when I witnessed it, I would know what they could have did to make it faster and what could have slowed them down, and maybe I could have helped them. The second reason why I would travel to Egypt in two, 600 bc is because I could meet really famous Egyptians from that time and put them pharaohs and greatly known people. If I could meet spectacular pharaohs like king Tuton kthen, I would be able to know more about his life and how he died, and have more knowledge about him if I find things like these very interesting from a long time ago, such as Egypt, the third reason why I would travel to Egypt is because I would learn more about how the average Egyptian lived. I could know what they were eating, if they were sleeping comfortably, and how they built different buildings. If I knew how they did things in their daily lives, then I would know how they would be treated and how other people would feel about it. All in all, if I were be able to travel to Egypt because of many different things, I would be able to learn more about their daily lives. I'd would be able to see the pyramids during their construction and meet famous Egyptians like pharaohs. Those are the reasons of why I traveled to Egypt in 20 600 bc. Fantastic. Thank you, Brian. What do you think about the essay from the based on the three criteria points? So I think the organization is really well stuck to all your reasons. And like. You did really good at like following the nature track of, for clarity, it was pretty clear, I would say, although sunmany people like and like if they didn't know much about Egypt, they like maybe didn't understand that much by book. It's like really good. However, and for a constant focus, I think you did great on that part because I will only be like you only sit in a travel back in Egypt to do these many things and stuff. But I think like what you could have done better was instead of like in the intro saying, I would go back to Egypt because of a few reasons, I think you could state the reasons in the intro and not say the first reason, the second reason and the the reason inside your paragraphs. Thank you, Brian. Yeah bone, what do you think? Do you agree? You disagree? I agree. Fantastic. Honestly, both of these are very strong essays. I have the same. The two points that I would raise are very similar to the ones I raised for Brian's essay. I think it's very clearly organized. The only thing would be, again, making sure that you don't bounce around between everything when you're talking about them and just being more specific in why you want to. I think for both of these, what I think might be the more interesting part, or I think a part that I think is going to be important to bring up, is not just why you want to do it, but like why you want to do it, right? It's one thing to say, Oh, I want to go back to ancient Greece because it's cool and I would learn loads about it. I want na go back to ancient Greece because I would then understand the Greek myths that help shape what I'm doing now. Like you like kind of put why you want to do it for yourself outside of just interest. Does that make sense? So we have ten minutes left. Let's spend five or so minutes trying to think about that, that argument, that reason for both of your choices. So good. Let's do like three sentences or a paragraph almost justifying your decision, right? Pretend someone is like really grilling you on why, like why, why? Caven, we can learn from them. They can learn from us, but we can do that with any era. Why specifically them? And same for Egypt, right? Does that sound does that sound okay? Okay. So we'll spend five minutes doing that. And then if you guys can put the the sentences, the two, three sentences in the chat again, and we can kind of go over them again. Okay, guys, I'll give you another minute. Just we have time to go over them. Okay, fantastic. If you guys want to toss them in the chat. Thank you. Okay, Brian, do you mind reading yours first and then Bowman yours? Okay, I could learn about so like what I wrote was mostly like what I can do if I did that. I could learn about my physical attributes and how they act in their daily lives. I could see amazing things like mamos and bring back samples of their dna to recreate them. I could teach them math and measurements and make them smarter to help them evolve faster and become even smarter over time. And so they could help the world for things that are happening right now, like global warming and other extreme problems that we have. And I could bring them to the present, and they could help with our lives if we need anything sengiven or are sometimes strong. Thank you. Thank you. I think that's interesting. So youwant to go because you want to, you want to learn kind of in a pre, a pre industrial or a pre, pre, pre modern civilization, kind of how humanity evolved to anything. That's something that we can learn from that. Thank you. Bowen, can you read yours? Okay, Egypt has been quite a big mystery back in 20 600 bc. If I could time travel, I could. Since some people are debating whether they even built the pyramids or not, traveling back in time would help solve that mystery and see if they did construct it. We could solve mysteries and improve how people build structures, even in the present, today. And sometimes people are confused about pharaohs too. If I went back to when King Tut was born, I could learn more about how he was raised and learn more about what his life was like back then, and compare it to how people are raised. In this present day life, even little details can have a big impact. So if I knew about how different average Egyptians lived, and if there are habits and little things that affect their life, it could be able to tell modern day humans about how it could impact us and see if it could help us with our struggles. Fantastic. Thank you. So you're focusing on really making sure that we have a clear understanding of what was happening in Egypt and the way that we can use that. Fantastic. Thank you. Do you guys have any final questions kind of about the about essay writing? We'll do some more essay prep as well. But just if are there any kind of last questions? No, I don't have any questions. No questions. Okay, really fantastic guys. Well, that is all the time that we have. Have a fantastic rest of your weekend and I will see you guys next week. Bye bye.