Four, so that was lesson 35. 30, Oh, I have to work it out. They haven't written it. So two, after this. 33, excuse me, Enrico, how was your day to. How is your day today, Enrico? Very good. I'm glad to hear it. And did you do anything nice? Yes. What did you do? Wanted the titanic imulsive. Hibioh, amazing. I want to go and see that. Apparently, that's very good. So how was it? Very good as everybody would say. Oh, that's so exciting. Yes, people have been talking about how good that is. Now I think you've actually finished the course in Rico. So let's see. That was last time, wasn't it? You did the wf last time. And this one is going to be that was lesson 36. There is no 37. We'll have a look. I think it might be this one. Yes there are if not don't worry we're gonna we I've got plenty here so we can do okay I don't think we've done this one so we have you've got your descriptive poems so I'll read that and that looks to be the last lesson so that means we are at the end of the course so I'm going to give you a bonus lesson there are some here and we will then have a look so you've got the extra two lessons that excuse me Enrico I usually have time to get all this together but because I went straight from class in it's straight from one lesson to another you can't you can't prepare you can only be in one screen at a time so let's see here. Okay, I think what we'll do is we'll look at your poem and we'll work with that because that will be the nicest. We have actually been taking these lessons in our own direction a lot of the time. So I've been looking forward to your poem and I think what we'll do is we'll put everything together in a new poem and we'll be brilliant. So here we go, two poems, fantastic, one from class and one of yours. Okay, can you read nummator pawalking? I swing his arms boldly, like gibbwatching for eagles. Under his hair was a siick sybody with legs, double hours, ards, really shouting at the storm from time to time. Since the sun was his mortal enemy, we must running and moving his legs quickly, like a vcon chasing its prey. Above his legs was a sildy boowith arms, just six astrees angry chathere from time to time. But it was his escaping dinner. Lovely. Fantastic. So really good, really amusing. Your last one about Remus, that's even, I would say even better than the one we did in class, because you've got these beautiful simmonies, like a falcon above his legs was a sturdy body. So sturdy. You've got an R in there, haven't you? I can see. Yes, with arms as thick as trees, angrily chasing a deer from time to time. For it was his escaping dinner. Fantastic. Okay, so what we're going to do is work with that ice spaced again and we're going to turn them into stories. We are gonna have Numitor. So let's have so have you ever seen movies where they do prequel? Have you ever heard of a prequel? So a prequis. What happens before the story? So sometimes you'll get a movie and you'll get part one, part two, part three and then they might say prequel. What was the story when numator was a child? Did something really strange happen to him? Did he maybe lose a brother? And that's why he picked up the kids. I want the same with with the other characters. What were they like as children? What happened to them and what turned them into who they were and who they became? So we've got numator, and you are very good at remembering these Roman names. Let's bring them up here. So you've got this one. Remus is the one that you did and wolves. And I think what we'll do. Amulius is it Aulius? Yes. Okay. So we're going to work on Aulius, and we're going to work on Aulius. As a kid, was he always as horrible as he turned out, or did something bad happen to him to make him horrible? What do you think? He was as horrible when he was born. He murdered one of his younger brothers. Oh, okay. So and these kind of things unfortunately happen in Roman mythology, don't they? And Greek mythology and Egyptian mythology, they they seem to kill each other a lot as kids. So it wouldn't be, it would be quite a normal story. So he was born pretty evil. Does he he do anything to his little brother for a reason? Is it because he wants to eventually, because he wanted to make fun of him? So he so he started to eat. So he started to eat him in his sleep every day. Fantastic. So we've got this part as well, which we didn't get to. So we'll get to that. But I'm going to move it on to pros, but still use ice based aced. So let me bring you this here and then we'll try and use each of these in a story. And what you wanna do is work on a good opening. C, so what's your favorite book? Is it Harry Potter? I think, isn't it? Yeah. And do you remember the famous opening lines? What the the opening lines ind, actually the whole first chapter was about how when Harry was little. Yeah if the ogo back and there's something about where he lives, isn't there from what I okay, let's have a look. Let's see Mr and mrses Dursely of number four privdrive were proud to say that they were perfectly normal. Thank you very much. So have you read that one? I think that's the first one. Yes. Okay. So that's a famous opening line and it's a very good opening line because it tells us the opposite, doesn't it? Do are they very normal? Yes, yes. But it tells us that something not normal is about to happen or is going to happen in the book. So because immediately we think, why do they have to say that? And then you think people who say that's usually the opposite, so this is a very good opening. It catches your attention. Sometimes you might open with speech. So you might open with something like, let me have a look if I've got this here. You might say, Hey, nummator Rob, what's this father called? Any idea what nummato's father is called? Rob romanious romanious. Rob romanious romanous in his distinctive boom. Booming, thundering voice. So that is a good starter. You can start with speech. You can start with where people live. So you can start with the area. So this Harry Potter one starts with the area and a description. So you can start with the area they live, which is called setting in ner story. You can start with speech. You can start with a character description. So we've got that there. We'll put that there so you can put character description. How do you describe you did? Let's use some of your beautiful poetry. Let's use your description of Remus. Remus moved his sturdy body and thick arms, tree like arms. So you might say like this as the beginner, Remus moved his sturdy body and thick tree like arms. Towards where's he moving his arms? Towards the towards the stump, the words that stop that so like his arms. Okay, there we go. We remember there was an argument with the stump, wasn't there? We won't bring that up. So you've got your opening starter with character description. You've got speech, you've got setting. You can also start with something funny if you want to make it a funny story. So have you ever read is it super grand? No, but I have a sorry super mom. Okay, so tell me about that. It's about my mom growing out the wover her kites one day and she and other saw she said, Oh, what? I go winings. So is that by David Williams also? Yes, and this is a funny star. Yes, he is a very funny writer. So Rob doll, David Williams, they usually start with something funny. I remember there was one about a toilet or something. So I finally got it. And this is what I wanted to show you. Wanted to show you all the openers. So I'll bring that over now. And I knew I had it somewhere. So you could start with something funny. So you might say, nummatore stopped to have a sneaky pick on his nose. Nobody could see. He at least he thought. So there is maybe something funny, maybe something a little bit gross or disgusting, but it will still catch people's. This is something very exciting because you always think that there will be somebody lobehind him. Yes, exactly. Yes. And then you can, talking of that, brings us on to the next one. You can also start with action. So if you start with action, you want to go straight into maybe the middle part of the story, and then you can do a flash back and go back, and that can be really good as well. So if you go straight into the action, you might start with what is nematogoing to do something very dramatic. All Remus. What do you think he could be doing? Could be in the middle of a fight, could be in the middle of doing something very strenuous, could be in the middle of running away from something. What do we think? Any ideas Enrika? Nim and hohit Amulius with a strong kick nummature it. Okay ammulius with a strong. You can almost say dead. It's like you're dead, like dead kick. Where did he kick him? Where does he kick him? A moand millions flew up into the air Milus a strong dead kick in. Okay, so we'll put in the stomach. Catapulting aullius into the air like a. Like a cut cannonball. Like a cannonball. Very good. Lovely. So that's a nice start. So you've got all these different kinds of starters. Action numator hit amulus with a strong dead kick in the stomach, catapulting aulleus into the air like a cannonball. Okay, so let's have a look here. Story openers. So here's what I was trying to find you, because this one has some really good examples of famous story openers. So you may recognize some of them because I know you do like reading, and we'll have a look at them and how these writers have done it. And we're gonna to choose what kind of opening we want to do. So it's important to get a good opener. Can you read this one? Why is it important to get a good opener and landdelizes the reader with an idea of who were when or what is happening or is going to happen? What is going to happen? Fantastic. So they might start with a character description. So this is from a David Williams Mr. Stink. Can you read this one? This ststank, he also sunk very good. So that's a good opener. It describes poor Mr. Stink. He stunk. He stank. And he's just a bit unfortunate. And that's from David Williams. So you could start with this. So let's move on to the next one. Okay, this one is your setting. So we did this. There was a, there was a small garggle mountain, torn flowers, each with a huof snow. Fantastic. So there was once a gaggle of mountains, tall and proud, each with a hat of snow. So that dis from something called the stone goblings by a writer called David Melling, and that describes this beautiful description of the mountains. Why does it say a hat of no. Oh, there's a curring covered over. And it looks like a hat. It looks like a hat. Fantastic. Is that a simile or a metaphor? The had a hat of snow. What do you think? A metaphor. It's a metaphor very good, because assimile would be like, or as that says, it actually has it very good. They could open with characters and setting together. So this one is character and setting. So can you read this one from the firework makers 's daughter. Selthem I going country east of the jungle home and south of the mountains there was left a firework. Michael called land very good. So this is a bit Chinese. Oh, really? So how is that? Because I just think it's a bit tiny. Seayes, actually, maybe. And the clothes, but also it does sound like China, doesn't it? It's got south of the mountains. There's got this lovely mythology here thousand miles ago. So yes, it does sound like an ancient Chinese story or something, but this is a very mystical, beautiful story. East of the jungle, south of the mountains, a firework maker. So you've got the part about the daughter. She's the firework maker's daughter, and you've got where she lives. So that is setting and character. So you can do that also. And then you've got dialogue. So we had a look at that with speech. So can you read this one? This is from shouted to a sister, would you please close that? Should that window or go second Tom? Oh, Wilby. Okay. So they are they've written a book together and they've started it with Maria shouted to her sister, would you please shut that window? It's quite good because you get the relationship of the sisters straight away and it seems like who is the bossy one? Maria Maria is the bossy one. So you get quite an idea of the sisters and perhaps who's the older one, who's the bossia one? You can also open with action as we've discussed. So can you read this? This is from the ghost of gria o'Malley by Michael mapugo. Another beautiful story. I know Michael, Jesse was always finding bounds in the great book of phibut. They ducthe people, though. Winter fire Res, fantastic. So you've got a beautiful description of Jesse. And what's Jesse hobby? Finding bhe likes finding bones in the field. So they usually find Pete something that youfind in the ground for their fires. But he likes finding bones. And it's a great starter. It gets us straight into the action. What is he doing? What's the thing he's doing? He is looking in the. Very good. So he's looking for things. Things are happening. There is action. Okay, very good. You can start with. A question. So some openers leave the reader with an unanswered question and again, captures your attention, makes you think so. Can you read this one? But have you ever had a feeling of life being through the toilet? Little doom. Have you read this one? No. So this one is the toilet of doom. And it starts with a question. Ever had the feeling your life's been flushed down the toilet? So that's quite a nice way to start, quite a funny way. But it's also a question. So it's getting people really thinking about the story and getting really into it. They can open with a statement. The opposite to a question is a statement. You're not asking something, you're saying it as it is. So you're telling them a fact, but it's a fact from your story. So it can be a made up fact because it's your story. Okay, can you read this one from the witches by Rob dohl. Fury tales, which is always were silly black hats are black cooks right on broomsticks. I read that one. I'm sure you have because I remember we talked about rodll quite a bit and you've read quite a bit of rodits the witches. Have you seen the movie also? No, the movies. I enjoy reading the book. The book's good, isn't it? The book's brilliant. The movie's pretty scary as well. It's really close to the book. Usually I much prefer the books, but this one, both of them were pretty good. So in this witches one rol doll is stating this as a fact. He's saying, which is always where silly black hats and black cloaks and they ride on broomsticks. So he's saying that's a fact. Fairy tales. This one, they're just dressed as little old ladies, aren't they? Normal little old ladies? And we don't know if they're any different to anyone else. You can start with a ronted adverbials. So fronted adverbials are what we learned last week from ice based ed. So can you read this one? Physical ago, Alex, Alan and ala aranbegood a lot of literation there as well. But what it does, it starts with this fronted adverbial that's the little bit at the beginning with a comma. It sounds nice and it sort of has a rhythm to it. So those are all the different kinds of openness. So if you have a look through, which one do you think you like the best? Do you like? So there's a few more to what we did. You've got, let's say, character description, setting character and setting speech, action, question statement, fronted adverbial. Which one do you think you would like to start with? Statement a statement. Okay, so you're going to make a statement about a funny made up statement. That's okay. Rob Dahl was king of that. So what we'll do is we'll bring up Rob dah's statement. There you go. He's talking, in fact, he's actually right about this, isn't he? Because then he goes on to say in real life they're not, but he's right about in fairy tales that they are on. Well, Miss Taylor, well, miss island of our school, be angry advice, I said, as she may be a witch. Okay, so because she's a very nice Young lady. Oh, bless. And just do you get on quite well with her? She's actually the teacher of year five, and I was never the same class with her. And my friend Joey told that she among that all homework needs to be done in one day. Oh, wow. So is does that change your opinion? Is she so nice? I think it's still really nice. Okay. Well, that doesn't mean anything, doesn't it? Probably mean she's a very good teacher. Okay, so let's have a look here at statement. You wanna say something as a fact, so who would you like to focus on? You've done numator and Remus. How about Amulius this time? Okay, yes. And itbe quite interesting because we can try and figure out what made him, who he was. So we want to, you've born evil, born evil. Okay? And what you want to do is make a statement. So make a fact about your story. Make a statement which is kind of like a fact about the world. That exists in your story. Or amus is very evil. Horsince, he was born, okay. So see if you can make that as funny as possible. Amulius alius was as evil as a andder, or when he was born, okay? He was born bad. He came out bad, and he continued being bad. So you can actually make that quite sound quite good. So maybe we can say how horrendously ugly he was or something. And that also added to people not liking him, and it was a weird child. So let's put let's invent your statement. So do you have your pen and paper there? Good. Now what we're going to call this is aullius, the prequel. What was he like before the story? We already know the prequel beforehand as a kid. And we can do any new story with him that we like. So we can also just think of making it. Don't make it too basic. You're a funny writer. You can add in that, how bad was he? If you compare him, if you compared him to someone really bad, two. Fly a boat. Fly. Oh, who's that? Fly? Aboboat the brother of vodemmode. Okay? So if you or I'm going to have to because that's one of those Romania spellings, isn't it? Vodemmodes brother, okay, so if you okay. Vodemortts brother, I'm going to have, if you compared him to vodemortts, you might have to do that spelling yourself because I've have not read the Howarts in such a long time. Vodemmots brother, how bad. Is he what bad things did he do as a kid? And what does he look like that might actually add something nice to his statement? So what is his constant expression? Like some people constantly smirking and constantly have a weird evil look on their face. So what is his constant expression? Like okay, so I want say he is very handsome, but he has serpent eyes like a snxed. Okay, love. And he has no bear, which he was even grown up and he was thin and handsome. I see. Okay. So okay, start your writing. So Amulius the Precourt and I look forward to hearing your statement and let me know when you're done as always and you can hold it up. All right, done. All right, let me know when you're done and you can hold it up. So I'll read it to you. Okay. So yes, you can read it if that's easier. Let's try. So preel okay. Amuthis was bad amuthis was boi'm bad a movie spthen evening so satother together very good anymore. His own ler brother 17 an evil expression. Beautiful. I like that. So you've actually got a little bit of description in with the statement as well. So fantastic. Two things joined in there. So hold that up. Let's see if I can get a shot of that. Oh, big Enrico, I think you definitely will try. No worries. All right, that's not too bad. Let's see. Okay, a bit of that's not looking too bad actually. Like the chin over the top especially gives a really nice effect. Okay, so let's pop that up there. And then here we go. La la la la beautiful. Oh, a little bit blurred, isn't it? Let's see the other one. Maybe that one is slightly better. Okay. Yeah, I think that one slightly better. Okay. I can see it a bit. And I'll be able to understand it when you read it. Fantastic. Really nice starter. So what we want to do, and it's quite funny, it's got your tone, which is specific to you, Enrico, and what we want to do is continue with that now. Now what is one of the first bad things that Amelius did in his life, and how old was he? He ate his own fulbrother. And Oh, that's pretty dark as well. So let's at what age was he? He was sick, so he ate his own former brother. Okay, so six, so he's some kind of weird monster as well, isn't he? Not quite human by the sounds of it. So let's now move Alan en Alan en ten he had the hobit of eating live hands. Yeah. Okay, of of live. Tell me again, what was that of live? Of live hence hold? Oh my goodness. So let's put that. So I'll start you off an example of how just how bad so we've got a bit of a Radoll feel to writing here. Just how bad Amulius was, was happened when he was just six years old. So what we want to do now is get that description going. So we, do you remember this one dash dsh H, did I ever do that with you? So yes, I think I briefly did this. So these are good for these after the openness. So after the opening, you've got to think, Oh, how am I going to continue that? So we're gonna to put the detail, then the action, then the speech, then how the character feels and then maybe a question as well. So that's what dash stands for. So we are going to now go into the detail. So that will involve what? So you don't want a lot of action. A lot of action sounds a little bit silly and a little bit immature. Actually, more detail is better. So here, tell us about maybe the room he was in. Describe the surroundings in the palace, or is he in the palace at this stage? So describe the surroundings. Describe his little brother. What does he look like? His little brother's appearance? Describe how. Everything looked on the day that to four, eight. Oh yes, look, a serpent. That's right. And you can, to use your description, you can use the five senses. Maybe he could smell the brother and he smelled really delicious to him, or maybe he smelled disgusting, but Amelius likes that. So use the five senses to describe all of these surroundings, the little brother, how he was maybe looking cutely up and holding up a toy from Roman times, and how he suddenly saw him. As you know, remember the cartoons, when they turn someone into a chicken in their imagination. Yeah imagining it as food. Maybe he was doing the same thing. Okay, so begin writing the next bit and start with this. An example of just how bad Amulius was happened when he was just six years old. And then you can go into describing the surrounded. Normal more. How are you doing, Enrika? Do that. Yeah, just checking you haven't fallen asleep. You're writing away. That's what I like to see. So I've have finished. Okay, so read that out to me. On that day, I'm soldilittle. Oh brother, bring a twin showing it, but he looked like a plate of raoff and tiwith, an aroma of the light amelious eyes and eating hole. Lovely. Okay, so you've got here now, did you can you try to hold that up again? Let's test it one more time because what I want to do is control which part is description and which part is action. So can you, if you hold that up. Oh, Oh, Oh. Beautiful. Okay, what lovely amount of writing you've done today. Okay or no? I don't think I can get that. Oh yes, maybe sometimes it clicks and it's not too bad awa luck. So when you Press the okay, that might be not too bad. Let's see how that next bit looks. Okay, putting it here. Lovely okay aullius eyes and he was eating are okay, so can you read from but. He looked like little rails and chips with smell of delous is almost huge ehookay. So what I think we should do is save that last bit, because we want to move on to action slowly. So now that you've got this this evil thing happening, amuliis eyes, okay, so we could just take off that bit and leave it there, and that would be very good. And then we'll get to the eating part in a moment. So you've got the description, then it's the action. So we'll want to sort of drag that out a bit. So Amulius, perhaps we can do short and long sentences for this action. So this is going to be the eating part. So action, you can experiment. If you do things like short and long sentences, it makes the rhythm really nice of the story. So you could do something like this. What is the brother called? Three don't know. Okay, baby bro, let's put for now baby brother. Amulius. Something came over amuleus. Okay. What I'm going to do is, but unfortunately. His baby brother. Cuteness had no effect on Amelius. In fact, so you might continue from here. In fact, he wanted him for quite a different reason. Looking at the baby as he turned to look up at his big brother, he stared down with an evil smile. And chp, so make it a little bit longer for that. So start that off. Just copy mine out. In fact, there you go, because I don't want to waste your evening. So we will leave this here because actually you can look at the video of this and there's also the transcript isn't there afterwards. So have a look at the transcript and I'll get you to finish that for a bit of homework. And we will have a look next week and we'll go through all the daash parts as well. So lovely to see you again in Rico and I'll see you next week. Bye bye.